This Haiku is written for Haiku Heights . The word is Alive and this is my entry .
Thoughts , noble deeds
Not the riches you acquire
Keep you alive forever
Wealth vanishes
But greatness blossoms, spreads
So the memories are alive forever.
Thoughts , noble deeds
Not the riches you acquire
Keep you alive forever
Wealth vanishes
But greatness blossoms, spreads
So the memories are alive forever.
8 Beautiful people shared their thoughts:
Very nice haiku, and so true.
That could be the secret to immortality. Lovely.
Sweta.. you must work on syllable count..you can remove forever in the last line..and add 'so' before alive.. and see what happens..in second one last line can just be.. "memories alive"..someone needs to say and guide.. I am taking liberty having received guidance from experts like Leo and Bill...
@MyWordsWhisper Thank you !
@Pattiken Ah, So true !
@Ramesh Sood Thank you for your generous guidance ! I did the changes and it looks like a perfect haiku :-)
No dear..the second haiku still has more syllables..
A syllable of sound of vowel..I give you a link to see..
http://www.howmanysyllables.com/index.html
Your second haiku has almost 20 syllables.. rethink.. the link will also guide you how to count..and even what a haiku is..in any case it has to be seventeen or less syllables..atter.. keep learning and keep evloving..
Inviting you to read my latest post for One Single Impression..here:
http://rameshsood.blogspot.in/2012/04/shells-of-deceit.html
Words of wisdom!
@Ramesh Sood Thanks for the informative link!
@Valli Thank you !
Post a Comment