This Haiku is written for Haiku Heights . The word is Warmth and this is my entry .
WARMTH
A pair of loving eyes
Still watching and inspiring me
In my moments of despair n solitude
You are gone, among the heavenly stars
But the whiff of your existence
Still lingers and gives warmth
P.S : The inspiration of this haiku is my grandmother ( a feisty lady who lived life on her own terms and always inspired to achieve my dreams) . I am very proud of her.
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Very beautiful lines... but you might want to look into the rules of Haiku... You gotta take care of the syllable count in each line..
:)
Thanks Pranita !
This is my first time ( was not aware of syllable limitations )
Will definitely take care of that in the next one :-)
Beautiful. as Pranita pointed out, take care of the syllable count..:)
welcome to Haiku then.. :)
And I'm sure she is very proud of you too. Lovely tribute.
Beautiful…really beautiful composition Shweta!
But yes there’re syllable restrictions in Haiku. It should be in 3-5-3 or 5-7-5 (Syllables) form :)
Loving eyes
still inspiring me;
solitude..
glittering
like a star you bless;
so much warmth..
see how it looks now.. 3-5-3.. but you can try 5-7-5 too.. well done.. recreate and enjoy the magic..
RS:)
@Jayanth Thank you!
@Pattiken Thank you for your inspiring words!
@Tarang Thank you !
@Ramesh Sood Thats so wonderfully said !
last one was very sad
alive on subway senryu
@Zongrik Thank you!Life's truths are usually very sad !Is n't it ?
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